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Friday, July 20, 2012

The Weightlifter


As the famous weightlifter Precious McKenzie was struggling to let the bar balance across his chest sweat came pouring down his face, like rain. The crowd began to get quiet, some even held there breath as if Precious was going to fail.

1 comment:

  1. I like. how you used a simile in your paragraph Mele. I think though you could have one more sentence to finish it off

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